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Some people think that all university students should study whatever they like. Others believe that they should only be allowed to study subjects that will be useful in the future, such as those related to science and technology. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

#people #university #students #study #subjects #future #science #technology
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It has been argued that whether all
students
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 who are in
university
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 should study whatever they like. Some people are for it while others think
university
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students
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 are only allowed to approach useful
subjects
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. On one hand, it is reasonable for several people to support the statement that
university
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students
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 should only learn the subject which is beneficial to their future.
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, biology is considered
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one of the most important
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 for medical
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 which contributes a lot to their academic learning in the future.
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, some people insist that
university
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students
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 still need to a number of
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 to colourful their school
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.
Subjects
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 like art, music and so on may not make a great contribution to polish one’s skills, but it does affect a person’s taste and value of
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. During my daily
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, as a medical student, it’s hard for me to maintain energy all day long.
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, I choose to learn about paintings and classical music to release my stress, which plays an important role in the construction of beauty appreciation. In conclusion, both of the views are convincing. From where I stand, I am for the
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 statement--irrelevant
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 are essential to
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students
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. Our
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 will be lit up by these interesting
subjects
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.
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    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • foster
  • engagement
  • excel
  • innovative contributions
  • diversity in research
  • well-rounded education
  • broad perspectives
  • critical thinking skills
  • mental well-being
  • burnout
  • forced academic paths
  • job-ready
  • skills shortages
  • tech-driven economy
  • employment rates
  • changing job market
  • utilitarian subjects
  • aptitudes
  • wasting talent
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