You recently heard about some new jobs at a local department store. You would like to work there. Write a letter to store manager of the department store. In your letter - Explain how you heard about the job - Describe the kind of job you would like to have - Give details of your experience and qualifications

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Dear Sir or Madam, I am writing to express my interest in some of the jobs advertised on

“Job-Bank”

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the “Job-Bank”

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website on February 5th, 2022. I am a registered member of Job-Bank and

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noticed advertisements for various positions in the food services department for

Oakville

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the Oakville

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location by Walmart. Among several positions advertised under retail bakery section for “Meat Cutters”, “Bakers” and ‘Cake decorators”, I am keen on cake decorating as I have knowledge about baking ingredients, techniques and about

product

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range. I have a diploma in Baking and Pastry Arts from Conestoga. I enjoy the process of creative creation, worked as a baker for 6 years at Sobeys. I have been recognised by the store manager for keeping

area

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clean, well-stocked and organised. My experience is not limited to cake decorating, I am a team player and possess excellent customer service

skill

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skills

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In addition

, I am accustomed to

work

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working

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independently in a fast-paced environment. I look forward to hearing from you for an in-person interview. Yours sincerely, Rohini Malhotra

Submitted by Toni R on Sat Feb 12 2022

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Coherence and Cohesion: 9.0

Logical structure

Single idea per paragraph

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Lexical resource: 5.0

Varied vocabulary

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Grammatical Range: 5.0

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Task Achievement: 5.0

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