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the proportion of spending in seven various habits of people in the UK batween 1971 and 2001.

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The given pie charts illustrate the proportion of spending in seven various habits of people in the UK between 1971 and 2001. The general overview here is that the majority of people spend their money on food in 1971,while three decades later, most population spend that on cars. According to the pie charts, it can be seen that in 1971, the highest number of people’s money was spent on food,accounting for 44%.
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 figure was significantly higher one time than that of cars. The corresponding for Cars, Petrol,Furniture and restaurant were approximately 22% and 10% and 9% and 7% respectively. the spending on books was lower than that,but still, its number was higher than that of computers. The latter indicated only 2% of the total amount. In 2001, there was a significant movement. There was a dramatic upward trend in the car spent with the figure of 43%.
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, Restaurant and Computers experienced a moderate increase in spending, roughly 14% and 12% consecutively.
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, the amount of spending on petrol and furniture dropped slightly to only 8% in each.
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, the people spend the least on books(only 1%).
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