The bar charts below show the top ten countries for the production and consumption of electricity in 2014. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The bar chart indicates the top
ten
nations for the production
and consumption
of electric power in 2014. The countries include China, the United States, Russia
, Japan
, India
, Canada, France, Brazil, Germany and Korea
. The unit of the
Correct article usage
apply
production
and consumption
were
Correct subject-verb agreement
was
billion
Change the article
a billion
kWh
.
Overall
, China had the highest rate
on
both Change preposition
of
production
and consumption
of electricity
percentage. On the other hand
, Korea
had the lowest rate
on
bothChange preposition
in
Correct article usage
the
production
and consumption
of electricity
percentage.
Firstly
, China had 5,398 billion
kWh
in the production
of electricity
while
5322 billion
kWh
in the consumption
of electricity
. The Whilst the
United States had the Correct article usage
apply
second
-highest rate
on both of it that was
4,099 billion
kWh
in production
of electricity
while
3866 billion
kWh
in consumption
of electricity
.
On the production
of electricity
rank, Russia
, Japan
, India
occupied positions three, four and five in the top Correct word choice
and India
ten
, which the rate
corresponding that Russia
was
1057 Wrong verb form
being
billion
kWh
, Japan
was
Wrong verb form
being
936.2billion
Correct your spelling
936.2 billion
kWh
and India
was
871 Wrong verb form
being
billion
kWh
. The final five places in the top ten
was
Canada had 618.9, France had 561.2, Brazil had 530.7, Germany had 526.6 and Change the verb form
were
Korea
had the lowest rate
was 485.1.
By contrast
, on the consumption
of electricity
rate
, Russia
, Japan
, India
occupied the same positions that Correct word choice
and India
was
three, four and five in the top Change the verb form
were
ten
, which was
1038, 856.7, Correct subject-verb agreement
were
698.8
. Correct word choice
and 698.8
On the other hand
, Germany had 582.5 billion
kWh
which was higher than Canada had 499.9 billion
kWh
. The final three place in the rank was France(462.9), Brazil(455.8) and Korea
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