Some people say history is one of the most important school subjects. Other people think that , in today's world , subjects like science and technology arer more important than history.

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both of the subjects can be really important in student's education process.

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world and help our new generations to upgrade and improve their knowledge about technology and important science's like genetics.

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like king's and queen's in the past or other famous personalities

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Some people say history is one of the most important school subjects. Other people think that , in today's world , subjects like science and technology arer more important than history.

Fully explain your ideas

As technology helps to gain access to information, fact teaching should be removed and school should focus on developing skills and talents. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

Art classes, such as painting and drawing are as important to a child's development as other subjects, so it should be compulsory in high school. To what extent you do agree or disagree?

In today's world many people own a smartphone . Do you think the advantages of owning a smartphone outweigh the disadvantages.

In some cities public parks and open spaces are changed into gardens where local residents can grow their fruit and vegetables. Do the advantages outweigh the disadvantages?

Academic- Task 1 The plans below show the site of an airport now and how it will look after redevelopment next year. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisions where relevant.