Some people say history is one of the most important school subjects. Other people think that , in today's world , subjects like science and technology arer more important than history.

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useful in today's world. In fact, in my point of

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both of the subjects can be really important in student's education process.

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world and help our new generations to upgrade and improve their knowledge about technology and important science's like genetics.

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, it can be really effective on students future job in today's life to know about some technology application's and

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's about working with computer's at school you will get a better job or

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in your future career.

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's like history can teach students many thing's. As the

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about our background and

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like king's and queen's in the past or other famous personalities

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are successful or overthrown can teach

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Sentence 3 - Discussion
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Coherence and Cohesion: 6.0

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Lexical resource: 4.0

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Grammatical Range: 4.0

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Some people say history is one of the most important school subjects. Other people think that , in today's world , subjects like science and technology arer more important than history.

Fully explain your ideas

The first car appeared on British roads in 1888. By the year 2000 there may be as many as 29 million vehicles on British roads. Alternative forms of transport should be encouraged and international laws introduced to control car ownership and use. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

The advent of the internet has made it possible for people to work from home. Do you feel this working argument has more advantages or disadvantages? Share your personal experience in your essay.

There is a growing awareness among people today that life should be enjoyed in all possible ways while the traditionalists do not agree with this view. They think that there are much more to be done in life other than just enjoying. Discuss both the views and draw your own opinions.