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Do the dangers derived from the use of chemicals in food production and preservation outweigh the advantages?

#dangers #chemicals #food #production #preservation
Food
 is the basic amenity of human beings, animals and birds. Earlier the
food
 products used to be organic and pure,
however
, nowadays the
chemicals
 like pesticides, weedicides and insecticides are being used to boost the yield of
bread
. I believe that chemical utilization has harmful impacts on everyone.
This
 essay is an attempt to address the cons of using
chemicals
 over their benefits. To embark with the over usage of
chemicals
,
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 is detrimental for well-being. Eating
food
that is
 produced chemically may cause diseases like
bread
 poisoning, infection or obesity. The research has shown that in the agriculture industry, there is seventy per cent more usage of insecticides compared to ten years ago.
Furthermore
, a health survey was conducted to examine the differences in well-being status. The survey revealed that people are more prone to infections and obesity as they are eating
bread
 grown with
chemicals
.
Although
,
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 the
chemicals
 can boost the quantity of
bread
 it alleviates the
quality
 which has detrimental to health.
In addition
 to the reduction in the
quality
 of outcomes of
food
 produced, the cost involved in
food
 production gets inclined. The farmers have to buy expensive
chemicals
 to increase the
yeild
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yield
 to compete with the wealthy agriculturists. The costly
chemicals
 do not return the amount on
thier
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their
the
 croppings because of the reduced
quality
.
Moreover
, the
quality
 of land
also
 gets declined due to harmful
chemicals
. In past, manure was used to increase the quantity and
quality
 of crops which was completely organic.
Also
, it does not cause harm to the environment and was cost-efficient. In conclusion, the
chemicals
 merely increase the quantity of
food
 produced but it is harmful to health and the environment,
moreover
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 it is expensive to use. The negatives of
chemicals
 outweigh the positive,
thus
 usage of insecticides should be abolished and organics should be used for farming.
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