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Some people believe that violence on television and in computer games has a damaging effect on the society. Others deny that these factors have any significant influence on people's behaviour. What is your opinion?

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Some
people
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 believe that
violence
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 on television and in computer games has a damaging effect on
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society
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. Others deny that these factors have any significant
influence
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 on
people
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's
behaviour
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. What is your opinion? Opinions are divided on whether
violence
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 in
media
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 has a positive or a negative
influence
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 on
society
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. In my opinion, violent
behaviour
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 on
media
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 is responsible for the serious problems in the community, since the crime rate is increasing day by day, as well as, in the coming generations,
people
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 are becoming indifferent towards each other.
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 of all,
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 is encountering
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the
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rapidly rising crimes ubiquitously.
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 is mainly happening because
people
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 regularly watch
violence
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 played by their famous stars on
media
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. As
people
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 spend most of their leisure time in front of televisions, computer games and Youtube or Netflix screens, they learn aggressive and violent
behaviour
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 from
media
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 platforms.
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 stimulates them to practice
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 type of attitude in their daily lives. Many
people
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,
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, are turning into criminals or terrorists by following the attributes of their favourite celebrities.
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, criminal activities are increasing in
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contemporary
society
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.
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, owing to the emerging violent nature of
people
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 in the community, cold and indifferent
behaviour
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 is flourishing.
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, in the past,
people
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 did care for each other, neighbours shared sorrows and sufferings of others, the young generation took care of the elderly.
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, nowadays, everyone has adopted selfish and arrogant
behaviour
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 due to the effect of
violence
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 on
media
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.
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,
people
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 do not bother
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 troubles of others and do not help in the plight of their needy and impoverished peers. All of these problems are arising due to the detrimental
influence
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 of
violence
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 on
media
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. In conclusion, I believe that the
violence
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 on
media
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 is causing serious repercussions on
society
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 in terms of exponentially rising crimes and rapidly increasing selfishness everywhere in the community.
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, it can be predicted that the negative
influence
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 of
violence
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 on
media
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 will keep on escalating in the future.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • pivotal
  • desensitize
  • catalyst
  • predisposed
  • harmless outlet
  • distinguish
  • controlled environments
  • empirical research
  • minimal or no direct correlation
  • socio-economic status
  • predisposition
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