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Some employers reward members of staff for their exceptional contributions to the company by giving them extra money.This practice can act as an incentive for some but may also have a negative impact on others. To what extent is this style of management effective? Are there better ways of encouraging employees to work hard?

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In periods of rising unemployment,employers need to do very little to encourage their
employees
 to work hard as
employees
 may fear losing their jobs.
In contrast
,when job vacancies are scarce,they have to find methods of rewarding their workers to prevent them from taking work elsewhere.
This
 can often be in the form of an individual financial reward.
However
, I argue that
this
 can have a negative impact on other
employees
 and that there are other practices worth considering. A common practice is to offer additional money to
employees
 who are working exceptionally hard and
this
 is often done in companies with products to sell.
For example
,estate agents,insurance salespeople and department stores can offer simple financial rewards for sales.Another approach
that is
 of benefit to people who do not have direct access to the public is for management to offer a bonus to all staff at the end of the year if the profits are healthy.
However
,
this
 does not allow the recognition of individuals who have genuinely worked harder than others. Another possibility is to identify excellent staff through various incentive schemes
such
 as Employee of the Month to make people feel recognised.
This
 might increase competition between
employees
 and lead to increased productiveness.Coffee shops,hotels and restaurants may
also
 allow staff to accept tips offered by customers and clients who are satisfied with the service.
However
, tipping is an unreliable source of money and does not favour everyone equally,
therefore
this
 may not be an effective practice. In my opinion,
employees
 generally want to be recognised for their contributions whether through additional money or encouraging words.They
also
 need to feel that their contribution to the whole organization is worthwhile.
Therefore
, good management should recognize
this
 need and should respond appropriately
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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