Some people believe that violence on television and in computer games has a damaging effect on the society. Others deny that these factors have any significant influence on people's behaviour. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

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Nowadays,
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on social media is becoming a serious problem that
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. Many
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argue that
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society, others claim that these factors can affect
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's behaviour. In my opinion, I believe that
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kind of
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does not affect our society.
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with, the programs that are being put on television should take measures,
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that they do not include extreme
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. Some
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do not have any plans on hurting
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, if they are not mentally stable, they can be affected. Up to now, there are many examples
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serious problems. Many kids have been affected and murdered
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friends, parents,
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etc
, due to the
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violence
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scenes on TV and computer games.
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, watching TV and playing computer games that have
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can have some advantages. Some
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learned how to protect
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themselves
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a good way to reduce stress from work and school. In conclusion, the government should share the knowledge about
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and drawbacks of
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people
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's behaviour in
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society.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • pivotal
  • desensitize
  • catalyst
  • predisposed
  • harmless outlet
  • distinguish
  • controlled environments
  • empirical research
  • minimal or no direct correlation
  • socio-economic status
  • predisposition
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