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The bar illustrates the percentage of clean energy out of the total amount of energy supply in four nations between 1997 to 2010.

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The graph illustrates the percentage of clean
energy
 out of the total amount of
energy
 supply in four nations between 1997 to 2010. Overall, what stands out from the graph is that Iceland and Turkey continued to be two of the highest in the
propotion
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proportion
promotion
 of clean
energy
 used, while Australia and Sweden remained the lowest two. In 1997, Icelands’ clean
energy
usauge
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usage
 began at about 44% , after 13 years, it
skyrockted
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skyrocketed
 to 70%. Throughout the period, it continued to be the highest in clean
energy
 consumption. Turkey,
on the contrary
, started at slightly below 40% slipped to about 32% in 2010, after a marginal increment of 2% in 2000. With regards to both Australia and Sweden, they experienced totally different trends. While Australia had a declining trend over the years, from 9% to about 5% approximately, Sweden’s usage climbed, from around 6% to 9% in the same period.
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