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The bar charts below show the top ten countries for the production and consumption of electricity in 2014. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The bar charts below show the top ten countries for the production and consumption of electricity in 2014. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The chart compares the
production
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 and the
consumption
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 of
energy
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 for ten
countries
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 from Europe (3), America (3) and Asia (4)
during
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 2014. The
countries
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 are prioritized from the greatest producer of
energy
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 (China) to the lowest producer (Korea).
Overall
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, most of the
countries
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 analyzed show a greater
production
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 of
kWh
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 than
consumption
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 of
energy
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.
However
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, Germany shows a bigger
consumption
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 the
energy
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 than produced in the same period.
On the other hand
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, China was the country not only with the biggest
production
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 (5.398
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billion
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 of
kWh
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) but
also
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 the greatest
consumption
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 (5.322 billion
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kWh
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).
While
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 the Republic of Korea shows the lowest
consumption
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 and
production
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 (449.5 billion
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kWh
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 and 485.1 billion
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kWh
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 respectively). From
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 of view, the ranking of
countries
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 by continent reflects that Asia and America produced and consumed the biggest amount of
energy
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 in 2014 mainly supported by China and The United States
that
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were
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where
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 the
Countries
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 that
the
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spend
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spent
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of
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energy
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 during the year was approximately 5 and 4 times bigger than the other
countries
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Vocabulary: Replace the words production, consumption, energy, countries, kwh with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 5 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "show" was used 3 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • electricity production
  • electricity consumption
  • megawatt-hours (MWh)
  • top ten countries
  • comparison
  • leading producers/consumers
  • highest producers
  • similarities
  • differences
  • relationship
  • significant gap
  • global scenario
  • balance
  • imbalance
  • overview
  • highlighting
  • identify
  • discuss
  • mention
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