Some people say History is one of the most important school subjects. Other people think that, in today's world, subjects like Science and Technology are more important than History. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

The importance of school
subjects
is likely one of the most discussed topics in the society, so, for some people studying or teaching
History
is more valuable than other
subjects
. And another group of society believes that
Science
and
Technology
have more value for nowadays. Taking into account that
the
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knowing
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of
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history
gives a lot about
past
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the past
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, I still tend to
opening
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new doors of
future
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the future
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by learning
science
and
technology
.
First
of all,
the
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history
has a big influence
in
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building
strong
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society where people know where they are "from".
This
gives a wide view about
future
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by not doing
same
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the same
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mistakes that were done in the past. But at school
studing
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studying
history
often
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a very boring process, most
of
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pupils
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the pupils
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don't interested in
this
ssubject
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subject
. Perhaps in real
life
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this
type of knowledge about
past
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is not necessary, so that's why most
of
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students
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forgot the information they studied at school. On another hand, the
subjects
Science
and
Technology
have more different areas that will be more interesting for students. At these
subjects
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,subjects
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pupils face
to
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a lot of practical workshops which helps them to get deeper knowledge in that area, so students may not forget it easily. In real
life
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these
subjects
could help people more than
history
, so they have the chance to do openings in different spheres of
science
or create new
technology
. In conclusion, there
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objectively
argumented
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arguments
opinions about what subject is more important for each of us.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • crucial
  • comprehend
  • retrospect
  • gain insights
  • reflect on
  • sharpen
  • evaluate
  • significance
  • heritage
  • legacy
  • advent
  • breakthroughs
  • sustain
  • sustainability
  • revolutions
  • empowered
  • overcome
  • transform
  • advancements
  • collaboration
  • cooperation
  • diversity
  • fulfilling
  • promote
  • facilitate
  • prosperity
  • enhance
  • foster
  • foundation
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