Fossil fuel, such as coal, oil and natural gas, is extensively used in many countries which cause harm to the environment. The use of alternative sources of energy, including wind and solar power, however, is being encouraged in many countries. Is this a positive or negative development?

In
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contemporary
contemprory
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era, environmental protection has
becomes
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a
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main concern. Increasing the demand
of
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Fossil
fuel
in many nations is proved to be
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detrimental
deterimental
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a deterimental
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effect on
environment
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the environment
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. Some think that nations should
use
alternative sources like
wind
, solar power
instead
of fossil
fuel
.
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essay will highlight the
postive
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positive
development of
this
approach.
To begin
with,
non- renewable
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source brings to the
environment
some cons. Since oil
use
in vehicles and run machines in factories
,
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emits a massive amount of harmful gasses which are considered to
be deteriorate
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for
environment
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the environment
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.
As a result
, people have to confront
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of diseases as well as the Ozone layer which
is protect
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us from
annihilate
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Sun rays, is going to
be vanished
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.
On the other hand
,
by
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using renewable
sourse
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source
sources
for example
wind
, solar power which is helpful for
environment
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the environment
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, can protect the
environment
from dangerous gasses. Government should
encourge
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encourage
their people to
use
alternative
source
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sources
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instead
of fossil
fuel
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fuels
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.
For instance
,
wind
energy which one can
use
in factories as well as
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home
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homes
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without
harm
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the
environment
. Government should
planted
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wind
power and solar system in every city in
this
way one can save
a
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immerse amount of
electrcity
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electricity
which will be helpful for our future generation. In conclusion, even though in
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world most
of
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people
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the people
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use
fossil
fuel
to live life easy, these
resourses
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resources
can be replaced by renewable sources which help us to protect the
environment
from harmful gasses.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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