It is important for children to learn the difference between right and wrong at an early age. Punishment is necessary to help them learn this distinction. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion? What sort of punishment should parents and teachers be allowed to use to teach good behaviour to children?

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Nowadays, parents apply different methods for raising their

children

.They believe that their child should be learned

distinction

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between wrong and right in their childhood and

punishment

is the best way.in my ,opinion these kinds of trends have negative effects on

personality

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children

, so I strongly disagree

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reasons. One of the most important reasons that we should avoid

punishment

is that

children

are too innocent,and most of their performances are

unintentionally

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.For ,instance a pupil who picks up his classmate’s pencil is not a thief ,and his action should not

considered

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as an example of theft. We should explain

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, why picking up other people’s belonging without permission is wrong,

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punishment

especially in public

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may have converse effects

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either they become introverted or stubborn and rebellious .

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, teaching right and wrong through

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attitude that big people are able to torment smaller

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.We have witnessed that older students started bullying in schools.Being aggressive

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be another destructive effect of

punishment

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, if teachers and parents are adamant to use

punishment

as a deterrent method , they should apply simple ones and avoid physical and mental penalties that make a permanent scar on their personalities.

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, picking up rubbish, cleaning classes in school or banning

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from watching tv are good examples of reasonable punishments. To conclude,

punishment

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causes

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converse effects on

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especially

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in the future , but if it is urgent simple penalty can be sufficient.

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Topic Vocabulary:

punishment
positive reinforcement
consequences
time-outs
removal of privileges
open communication
clear expectations
consistency
fairness
disciplinary action
proportionate
moral values
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