In certain countries, unemployment is so high that some have suggested children should stop their education after primary school to learn skills necessary to join the workforce. Do you agree or disagree?

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In certain countries, unemployment is so high that some have suggested children should stop their education after primary school to learn skills necessary to join the workforce. Do you agree or disagree?

Fully explain your ideas

You need to take some time off of work to go on holiday. Write a letter to your direct manager

Employers sometimes ask people applying for jobs for personal information, such as their hobbies and interests, and wether they are married or single some people say that this information may be relavant and useful.Others disagree. Discuss both these views and give your openion.

It is commonly said that today's children are facing huge challenges. This essay indent to discuss the causes of these pressures and give some suggestions to solve them.

In the past, knowledge was contained in books. Nowadays, knowledge is uploaded to the internet.Do the advantages of this outweigh the disadvantages?

Write a letter to a friend asking for a recipe from his/her country for the party you are organizing. In your letter – Tell your friend about the party – Ask for the recipe – Explain why you need the recipe from his/her country.