In certain countries, unemployment is so high that some have suggested children should stop their education after primary school to learn skills necessary to join the workforce. Do you agree or disagree?

Few countries, around the
world
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thinks
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learing
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learning
some skills will help to reduce
the
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unemployment
without proper
education
. I
completly
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completely
disagree with
this
ideology, just
by
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learning a particular
skill
without proper
education
is not really going to solve the
unemployment
issues, rather it will
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more
unemployment
.
Also
, it will bring more difficulty for
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child
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to scale in
this
competitive world. In
this
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essay
easy
eassy
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I will be discussing
on
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why
this
will not help to solve
the
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unemployment
and
children
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growth.
Firstly
, just learning the
skill
without proper
education
will never help to solve
the
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unemployment
. Let's assume, the kid is learning a farming
skill
;
this
skill
may help
child
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to survive today but, it is not going to help him or her to develop
the
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opportunities for others. At the
sametime
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same time
, if the
child
learns the
skill
with proper
education
then
it is possible to enable more opportunities to reduce
unemployment
using
moden
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modern
technology.
Secondly
,
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college
education
will help the
child
to learn and grow in the competitive world. Just learning the
skill
without proper
education
the youngster will try to do something using
legacy
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process which may not work in the long run. To
conculde
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conclude
, every parent should ensure that children are getting
proper
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education
.
This
will help
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child
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to reach
better
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position
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and
also
, help to reduce
unemployment
by creating more opportunities.
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