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Being a celebrity-such as film star or sports personality-brings problems as well as benefits. do you think that being a celebrity brings more benefits or more problems?

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People
 have different opinions over whether becoming a well-known star is beneficial or not. Some
people
 claim that celebrities have many drawbacks.
However
, I strongly believe that the advantage of being famous
people
 overwhelm the disadvantage. On the one hand, some
people
 point out that stars tend to suffer from a lack of privacy as the public desire to know about their
favorite
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 stars’ life. Since ordinary
people
 want to be like VIPs, they become nosy. Not only can
this
 tendency cause
gossips
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,
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it may
also
 bring about interfering
superstars’
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 life.
For example
, a survey conducted by the Korea Media Foundation has revealed that almost 30% of
world-wide
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 famous
people
 are
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 about the scarcity of privacy. As the example clearly illustrates, some
people
 tend to easily forget that they disrupt their stars’ life.
On the other hand
, VIPs can easily earn money due to their reputation and prestige. As their pictures and speech play
key
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 factor in advertising products, many companies are willing to invest funds
on
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 them.
For instance
, a posting
that is
 written on social media by Hae Gyo Song who is a very popular actor is worth
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50 million dollars.
Therefore
, it is evident that
such
 well-known actors can gain money by marketing. In conclusion, while I accept that being superstars can sometimes be rather annoyed due to a lack of privacy, there is no doubt that they are well paid with their popularity.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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