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Because many children are not able to learn foreign languages, schools should not force them to learn foreign languages. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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Since a lot of young children can’t learn foreign languages, schools must not teach them to learn foreign
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languages
.
This
 topic has been a controversial issue up to date. In my opinion, I agree that young
students
 learn
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second
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language
languages
 in
school
.
This
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 the positive impact of
this
 trend and
thus
 will lead to a logical conclusion. Some
language
 education experts say that young children’s
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 are like a sponge so they can
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absorb
 and digest what they learn from
school
. They added that the younger the
students
 are, the more comprehensive they are when learning subjects
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 languages.
For example
, it takes a month to learn foreign languages with
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 for young ages because they can learn with ease and practice like doing a game,
on the other hand
, the adults can take a longer time to learn with
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.
Secondly
, it is beneficial for young
students
 to be able to speak more than two
langueges
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languages
 nowadays. As we’re living in
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 globalized world,
foreign
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language
 can be a bridge to
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connect
 the countries and make
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 closer
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 other. In that point, it is evitable that learning
foreign
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language
 is essential in
school
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 for young pupils. Being able to speak
second
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language
 gives
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strength and confidence even when young
students
 study other subjects in
school
. In conclusion, it is controversial whether the schools encourage the young
students
 to study foreign
languagues
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languages
.
However
, according to the aforementioned arguments above, one can reach a
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conclusion
 that the benefits of learning
second
languagues
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languages
 in
school
 are indeed evitable.
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