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In many countries senior positions have higher salaries compared to those of young workers of the same company. Some people think this isn't justified. Do you agree or disagree?

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It is
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commonly
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taught
thought
unjustice
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, when in a big number of countries well-paid salary get only, who in senior positions but at the same time the younger generation do not receive the same salary as an elder one
nevertheless
 they are in the one
company
. I completely disagree with
this
 notion and in
this
 essay, I try to explain my position.
To begin
 with,
an
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 experience of
yongsters
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youngsters
 who want to have a big income to compare with high position employee. It is too
striky
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sticky
 for
company
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the company
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 to pay high fee whole staff members despite their work's experience, age, ability to solve problems.
Furthermore
,
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an unexperienced
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unexperienced
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inexperienced
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 person could not
to
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face
with
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troubles which can
be appear
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 for a while.
Also
,
younger
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a younger
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member
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members
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 of
team
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the team
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, by far would not have
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necessary
necessery
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 outlook, to create a suitable
atmoshere
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atmosphere
 for work.
Secondly
,
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freshmen
freshmen's
freshman
freshmens
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freshmen
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 often tend to be lazier than experienced workers
what
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 can be a disadvantage for their
company
.
Moreover
, beginners are people who have just started their adult life so they have a number of duties,
responsebilities
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responsibilities
 and other problems related to family or life. It may
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 as the most
unjustice
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 thing in their life for newcomers who do not take care
about
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company
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the company
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 or their
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responsibilities
 but only want to earn more and more money. From my point of view,
this
 kind of
employees
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employee
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do
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 not think about
company's
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the company's
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 prestige which can be bad for
firm
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the firm
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 or
company
. To conclude, I strongly disagree with
statement
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the statement
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 that senior
position
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positions
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 ger a higher salary than newcomers.
This
curcumstance
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circumstance
 to help recruits improve their desire to work more and gain experience by doing everyday
task
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tasks
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.
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