The charts below show the proportions of British students at one university in England who were able to speak other languages in addition to English, in 2000 and 2010.

The charts below show the proportions of British students at one university in England who were able to speak other languages in addition to English, in 2000 and 2010.
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The pie charts below illustrate the proportions of British
students
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at one university in England who were able to speak other
languages
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in addition
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to
English
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between 2000 and 2010. In general, in the year 2000, the
percentage
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of
students
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speaking
languages
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other than
English
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reach 80 per
cent
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, the category of
students
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who speak Spanish has the largest portion among the whole categories.
In addition
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,
students
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who speak only French and those speaking in other
languages
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with
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15 per
cent
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.
However
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,
students
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who speak two other
languages
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and those who speak German only
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have
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the same
percentage
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of 10 per
cent
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which can be regarded as the smallest portion.
However
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, there is only 20 per
cent
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of
students
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speak only
English
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. It has a significant change in 2010, the
percentage
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of
students
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speaking
languages
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other than
English
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increased
10
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by 10
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per
cent
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compares to 2000. It shows 35 per
cent
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of
students
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speak Spanish which is still the biggest category in 2010. The
second
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-largest portion is 20 per
cent
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, in the category of
students
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who speak other
languages
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.
Furthermore
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, the
percentage
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of
students
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who speak French only has a 10 per
cent
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increase between 2000 and 2010. The group of
students
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speaking in
English
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and French decreased, both of them have 10 per
cent
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only in 2010. Interestingly,
students
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who speak German only keeps
steadily
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with
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at
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10 per
cent
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in both 2000 and 2010.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "however, in addition".
Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 93%.
Vocabulary: Replace the words students, languages, english, percentage, cent with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "proportions" in your introduction.
Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 4 times.
Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 2 times.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • proportions
  • British students
  • university
  • speaking other languages
  • language proficiency
  • overall trends
  • comparison
  • 2000
  • 2010
  • chart
  • data
  • percentage
  • significant
  • increase
  • decrease
  • noteworthy
  • comparative analysis
  • improvement
  • decline
  • conclusion
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