Completing university is thought to be the best way to get a good job. On the other hand, other people think that getting experience and developing soft skills is more important.discuss both views and give your opinion.

There is a
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debate that has
sparked
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all over the world. It is considered that the most
effectice
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method to get a great job is
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finishing
university
.
However
, some people believe that it is necessary to have
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experience
and
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soft
skills
. In
this
essay, a discussion of both views and my opinion will be mentioned.
First
of all, there is no denying
fact
that completing
university
is one of the important points in finding jobs since almost all of the companies and employees want educated and
skillful
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employers.
In addition
, the majority of people think that a person who has already finished his courses at
university
is
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at
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his respective field.
This
is because the
university
is the place where all the required
skills
and knowledge are
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togther
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together
. Education is essential in searching
carrer
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career
, especially for fresher employers because they do not have any
experience
and their educational
fact
is the only one that the company can look
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On the other hand
, juniors cannot compete
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. The more
experience
you have, the better connection and achievement you can get. Some
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businesses
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business man
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said that
university
courses are based on imagination.
Moreover
, the capability of the work
also
depands
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depends
on the
pratical
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practical
experience
.
This
is the reason why the senior workers have more ability to
sovle
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solve
the hard
situition
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situation
situations
and complete the task perfectly. Another
fact
that will be pointed out is that soft
skills
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also
important to be a
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workers
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. It is undeniable
fact
that people who have soft
skills
such
as networking, teamwork, creative idea and
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skills
are more likely to
acieve
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achieve
the project. From my
pointof
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point of
view, both of the ideas are great.
Besides
, the companies should give the chances to the freshers as same as the expert seniors.
Last
but not least, it is important to choose correctly according to the work position.
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The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
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  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

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