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In recent years, there has been growing interest in the relationship between equality and personal achievement. Some people believe that individuals can achieve more in egalitarian societies. Others believe that high levels of personal achievement are possible only if individuals are free to succeed or fail according to their individual merits. What is your view of the relationship between equality and personal success?

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Equality means that
people
 will have the same rights and treatments, and in
this
 kind of
society
, I believe
people
 will achieve more than in
unequal
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 environment. For
equal
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society
, public service will benefit
people
 a lot and improve their sense of well-being. One important factor is the medical factors. All of the
people
 will have the rights to be treated
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 and if the illness is very serious like cancers that hardly can be cured,
government
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 will take
burden
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 of it and take most of the responsibilities. Another factor is education , all the citizens have the same
rights
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 to receive education for free. In a
society
that is
 equal, it should not appear the phenomenon that wealthy
family
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families
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 paying
higher
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a higher
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fee
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 to gain better education and teacher
thus
 lead to a better job background and opportunities.
In
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equal
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society
,
people
 will have more opportunities to purchase their wants because their opportunities are the same and they would not have
the
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dissatisfaction
Besides
, they may have more motivation to achieve their personal success. Wherever, in a
society
that is
 unequal,
people
 will feel that they are not treated equally and will have resentment towards life, though equality does not have the necessary connection with personal achievement.
Moreover
, if
people
 make the same efforts but the results
turns
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 out to be different due to the
uneqaulity
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inequality
, it will greatly demotivate
people
 to achieve their personal success for they know some factors
such
 as the family backgrounds cannot be changed and they will easily give up on their way purchasing. In all, in
equal
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society
, it seems that personal success may be
more
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easier and more
motivate
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 for
people
 to achieve and keep purchasing it.
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