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Because many children are not able to learn foreign languages, schools should not force them to learn foreign languages. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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It is debatable that many
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 should not force them to learn foreign
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. some people claim that not forcing to learn
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 is beneficial to students. while others reject
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 reduces
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 of people agree on
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 should learn an array of subjects. To be specific, It is obviously true that they have to learn many
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, they can reduce motivation.
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 of independence.
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to foreign
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 to learn foreign
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 are indeed influential.
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