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commence with the view of disagreement people believe that street markets have their own features and they will remain on the same place in the coming years. To answer it, selling goods on the streets is always available on the rThe recent popularity of online shopping will result in the end of high street shops. To what extent do you agree or diagree.

It is considered that with the advancement of technology majority of individuals give
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 preference to
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online shopping which will disappear the street markets. I
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largely
 agree with
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 statement due to the convenience and the flexibility.
easonable
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reasonable
 price.
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, low-income families can easily afford them without any obstacles.
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, streets
shops
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 play an imperative role in the
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people
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. Shifting towards the view of agreement why online shopping will gain more popularity and replace
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street marketing. The most
prodiminant
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predominant
prominent
 reason is the ease of buying products with their full of
satisfication
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satisfaction
. To explain it,
people
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 can purchase goods without wasting money on the transport which they usually spend when they go individually.
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, a recent survey was conducted by the Amazon Company
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revealed that 50% of
people
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 are satisfied with
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online shopping because they got
variety
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 of
product
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products
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 online which is not possible
on
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 the local
shops
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, marketing on
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online websites
give
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sense
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 of
fulfillment
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 to
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 significant proportion of
people
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.
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 strengthening the views, there are numerous benefits of online shopping which allures to the multitudes. The most prominent is the flexible time
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reasons
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of
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 choosing
online
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an online
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 platform for
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shopping.
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,
people
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 have become
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workaholics and they do not have time for going to the local
shops
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, but with the assistance of online
shopping
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 they can
fulfill
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 their desires.
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, a headline of royal shopping magazine
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found that 75% of
individulas
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individuals
 save their valuable time due to
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online shopping.
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, it has become
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 part of the young generation in the competitive world.
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,
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 purchasing
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products from the local
shops
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 have some positives sides but I believe that the
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 of online shopping outweigh the street
shops
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 and online shopping will take place of local
shops
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