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Group or team activities can teach more important skills for life than those activities which are done alone. Do you agree or disagree?

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Currently, there is a discussion with regard to
activities
 of the
team
 and alone. It is argued that leading teams’
activities
 could improve personal competencies, even more than individual
work
.
This
 essay agrees with that statement because
work
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 in
group
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the group
a group
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 could improve
the
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interpersonal intelligence. When people talk about
team
activities
, exists many reasons to believe that it is an exceptional tool to have more opportunities in several areas, not only in job or career,
otherwise
 in personal life. Many authors in organizational psychology and social studies affirm that
group
activities
 could increase important abilities
such
 as communication with other people, leadership, empathy, sense of belonging, resolution and management conflicts, even could have a huge impact on self-knowledge, stress and self-esteem.
For example
, Coleman, author of several emotional intelligence books and important research, has discovered that teamwork can significantly improve personal and
group
 performance, even rise productivity,
thus
, he has recommended
team
activities
 when exists difficult in a
work
 environment. Another reason why the promotion of
team
activities
 should be recognized is the fact that humans learn vicariously from an early age,
in other words
, a person, even a child can learn by watching others,
moreover
,
group
activities
 give feedback about personal performance and
skills
 and increase the opportunities to develop better networking and adequate social support.
For example
, many school teachers are implementing
group
activities
such
 as projects whit the objective of improving students' personal and
group
 learning,
as a result
, students can learn from each other, improve their social relationships with peers, make friends, even they may have more excellent academic results.
On the other hand
, a person who works or play in a solo activity develops a sense of self-responsibility and time management. But we cannot forget that an individual develops more
skills
 in
group
work
 and those
skills
 can be applied in our daily lives. In conclusion,
team
activities
 are a wonderful strategy to develop and improve personal and social
skills
, not only in organization or jobs but,
also
 in personal life, no matter if it is about adult, teen or child,
moreover
, gives an excellent opportunity to learn from others and receive feedback about different topics. Y would strongly suggest teachers increase the
group
activities
 of their students.
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