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In today's job market it is far more important to have practical skills than theoretical knowledge. In the future, job applicants may not need any formal qualification. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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Nowadays, the job market is far more interested in employing
people
 that have formal qualifications than
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 skill sets. It is predicted that
this
 will change in the near
future
. In the
future
, job applicants may not need any
qualification
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 to work in a professional field. In
this
 essay I will talk about how I feel about
this
 topic and if I agree or disagree about it. I disagree with
this
 particular change in society.
Although
 I don't have the power to control the
future
 of what will happen with the educational system in the
future
, I see
this
 as a very bad way of putting
people
 in the correct career positions. I believe that you must earn your position by working on a career path over a certain amount of time depending on the career you have chosen, and not whether you have the vision you have for it or not. I do agree that the
people
 that do have ideas for certain projects could potentially support the business financially. I am not implying that
people
 with no qualifications
shouldnt
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shouldn't
 be a part of any organization, I am just saying that in order to have an important role that has many depending on you should require educational qualifications. The reason I find it difficult to agree with
this
 is
because
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 if many employees are dependent on an uncertified member of a high position, their job won't be as reliable or comfortable as it was before. In conclusion, I believe that unqualified employees should not have a high position in any field of work because it puts other qualified workers' jobs in jeopardy.
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