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Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparison where relevant.

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The bar graph
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delineates
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 the change in the weekly
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 travelled by individuals in the United Kingdom in 1990 and 2000 using five specified modes of transport. Overall, it is apparent that while there was a marginal rise in the total kilometres travelled by air, bus and rail; bicycles and motorbikes had lost some popularity leading to a decline in the
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 travelled by individuals using them.
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, the statistics provided in the bar graph made it evident that travels by bus and rail remained a major portion of the per capita
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 travelled per week both in 1900 and 2000, with a minor increase at the beginning of the 21st century.
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, the
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 covered through air travel rose considerably in 2000 as compared to its proportion in 1990.
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 the usage of bicycles and motorbikes not only remained at an all-time low between 1900 and 2000 (just below 5 km to be precise), it
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 plummeted to become negligible by the year 2000.
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