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Some people believe that the activity of large multinational corporations mostly benefits the economy of developing countries. Other people take the opposite view and feel that these large multinationals are generally harmful. Discuss both views and give your opinion

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It is a common belief that massive multinational
firms
 are generally harmful.
However
, there is a more persuasive
agurment
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argument
 that large international
company
 mostly provides benefits in the development of developing country due to the investments of these type of
company
are
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being
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 usually higher than the local
firms
,
creates
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 more yield that a worker can do. On the one hand, a multinational
company
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company's
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develop
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development
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 can cause the exclusively in trade of a country.
Consummers
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Consumers
therefore
 will have less choice and
an
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affordable prices in some exclusive fields of
consumming
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consuming
-process.
For instance
, gas and electricity are one of the most important
area
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areas
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 in the
develop
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development
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on
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of
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 every country,
however
, in
Vietnam
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 only the national corporations can join in
this
 kind of
fields
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.
This
 cause a harmful effect in the trading environment and the government will control the prices of gas and electricity,
directly
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makes
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 people have only one choice when they have a demand on
its
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it
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.
Nevertheless
, I support the idea that the progress of large international
firms
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are mostly provides
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are mostly providing
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beneficial
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 effect on the
economy
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economic
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 area because
of
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apply
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the investments of its are usually higher than the domestic companies,
creates
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creating
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 more yield
that
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than
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a
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an
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 individual can do. Investment
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from
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form
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from
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 foreign countries are usually huge, and these
company
also
 create an efficiently
working-process
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working process
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 that higher than almost local
firms
 do. According to a
reccent
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recent
 survey, in developing countries, multinational companies create a healthier competitive environment than the local ones.
Moreover
, its giant investment
also
create
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creates
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 a higher yield and income for the
company
 and employees. To sum up, while it is apparent that large international
firms
 can
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affect
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effect
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affect
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 negatively in
the
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society. It is
undenieable
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undeniable
 that these companies usually
benefits
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benefit
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 the economy of developing countries.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Job creation
  • Technology transfer
  • Economic growth
  • Gross Domestic Product (GDP)
  • Exploitation of labor
  • Unfair labor practices
  • Working conditions
  • Job security
  • Environmental degradation
  • Pollution
  • Deforestation
  • Depletion of natural resources
  • Cultural homogenization
  • Erosion of local cultures
  • Balance and regulation
  • Host countries
  • Implement policies
  • Mitigate negative impacts
  • Enforcing labor laws
  • Environmental regulations
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