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Some businesses find that new employees who just finish their education lack basic interpersonal ability such as work with others as a part of team. What do you think are the causes of this problem? And how to solve this?

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In recent years, the ability
of integrating
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 theory with practice is required by the application of the prestige companies.
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, there
are
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 a growing number of graduates
failed
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 to apply successfully
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 their restricted knowledge
on
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 interpersonal communication.
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, to enhance the competitiveness of graduates, it is necessary for schools to offer relative
courses
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 in order to make
students
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 communicate better. Several factors may lead to the limitation of
communication
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the communication
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 skills of undergraduates. At first thought, to face the cruelty of reality, it is essential for
students
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 to allocate their time
on
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to
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 academic
courses
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 to get
a
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outstanding education background which is the bar for admittance
of
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 some companies.
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, as
students
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’ first objective is to get high academic qualifications, their time
of devoting
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into
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 services or mass organization is numbered, which
establish
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 a strong link with
students
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’ lack of certain skills, including teamwork or work ethic.
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, the education system in Asia involved reciting impractical knowledge usually occupied the time for
students
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 to explore and adapt the society, which
finally
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 resulted in the lack of interpersonal ability of college
students
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. To tackle the problem of
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 worrying issue,
university
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universities
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 and
government
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governments
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 are obligated to provide some effective measures. Ultimately though, the most effective solution is to offer comprehensive
courses
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relate
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 to
the
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apply
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cooperation in offices and the adaption in
the
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society.
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, the
overall
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 development of
students
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 should be encouraged by
government
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the government
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 so that parents and schools would lead
students
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to
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attend several extracurricular activities to know the importance of teamwork.
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, the modernization of education and the added curriculum could let new employees understand how to deal with the relationship between superior and subordinate.
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, the causes of
lacking
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 interpersonal ability of undergraduate
students
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 in the company could be combined into one reason, the pressure and competition of the current learning mode. And in the long-term with
improvement
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the improvement
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 of
courses
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, new employees could be
release
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released
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 from
deficiency
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a deficiency
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 of communication skills.
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Structure your answers in logical paragraphs

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A strong argument essay structure can be split up into 4 paragraphs, each containing 4 sentences (except the conclusion paragraph, which only contains 3 sentences).

Stick to this essay structure:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion

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