The diagrams below show the development of a small fishing village and its surrounding area into a large European tourist resort

The diagrams below show the development of a small fishing village and its surrounding area into a large European tourist resort
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‏The two plans illustrate how small coastal villages in Europe grew into large tourist centres between 1974 and 2004. ‏there was where was a massive rise in the total population of 130,000 in 2004, which used to be 12,000 in 1974. It can be seen that there are several major changes mainly involving the construction of hotels and
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infrastructure. There used to be
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vast. woodland in the East that has
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golf Course, Not only were olive plants demolished, but the harbour
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harbour was replaced with a beach stretching from west to east. Another striking change is the number of high-rise hotels
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built along the coastline on both sides of the original village.
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, the main road has been built to cope with the increased traffic
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the area and provide easy access to other villages. It is interesting to note that some villages and tourist shops were constructed. the original village had no changes between 1974 and 2004.
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