The school library is seeking applicants for a job over summer break. Write a letter to the library’s manager, in your letter include: – A brief introduction of yourself – Your experience and relevant skills – Why you want the job
I am writing a
job
application in your library office for permanent
employee.
I have been Add an article
a permanent
member
of Quaid e Azam Add an article
a member
library
since 2019 and I Capitalize word
Library
was
studied Unnecessary verb
apply
in
my exam days. Change preposition
during
This
library has huge advance
books and it helped me a lot in my Master's degree. When I was looking for Replace the word
advanced
vacancy
Correct article usage
a vacancy
Rephrase
apply
then
I saw the job
ad on the board. Besides
this
, particular field I decided to send you my resume and tell you about my experience for
Change preposition
in
this
position.
I had been working for 2 years when I left my job
due to
my mother's illness. Although
, the Smart Call center
I was being worked as a receptionist. Change the spelling
centre
The
communication skills are good Change the word
My
as well as
bilingual languages knowledge English
and Turkish. Change preposition
of English
Furthermore
, guiding to
Change preposition
apply
the
new clients Correct article usage
apply
is
Verb problem
has
also
added in
my experience.
Change preposition
to
It
Correct pronoun usage
I
is being
worked for 2 years at Wrong verb form
have been
job
but my circumstances Correct pronoun usage
my job
was
changed so I quit my Verb problem
have
job
and from that day I am
not doing any Verb problem
have
job
. As I mentioned I have an excellent experience and knowledge for this
position so please consider my application. Moreover
, I need this
job
because I have to run my family and It is impossible without any
Correct determiner usage
a
job
. If you see my CV I assure you I will be the right person for this
job
.
I am looking forward to hearing from you as soon as possible.
Yours Sincerely,Submitted by mobinadurrani43 on
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coherence cohesion
The letter lacks a clear logical structure with ideas not flowing naturally from one to the next. Ensure that each paragraph has a clear purpose and that ideas within paragraphs are well-connected.
coherence cohesion
The greeting and closing of the letter should adhere to the formal conventions of letter writing. Including a proper salutation and closing formula is essential.
coherence cohesion
Each paragraph should focus on a single idea and provide relevant details related to that idea. This helps maintain clarity and coherence throughout the letter.
task achievement
The response is incomplete as it does not adequately cover all the points required by the task. Ensure to include a brief introduction of yourself, detail your experience and relevant skills, and explain why you want the job in distinct, well-developed paragraphs.
task achievement
The tone of the letter at times shifts away from the suitable formal writing tone expected in job applications. Maintain a consistent, professional tone throughout the letter.
The Greeting
Depending on the style and aim of the letter, you will need to adapt your greeting.
Always start an informal letter in the ways:
- Dear + name
- Hi / Hello + name
‘Dear...’ is more appropriate, so stick with this.
For a formal letter there are two options for the greeting:
- Use Dear Sir or Madam if you don’t know the name of the person you are writing to.
- Use Dear + surname if you do know their name, e.g. Dear Mr Smith or Dear Mrs Jones.