Some people say History is one of the most important school subjects.Other people think that,in today's world,subjects like Science and Technology are more important than History. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

All subjects are important in
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ways, though they are some which are relevant depending on the time in which the
world
is operating. History is relevant
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because it gives a
background
of any subject of
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research
that will help or give
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of the current situation to the future.
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Science
and
Technology
are as well of great relevance
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in
this
dispensation of time we are in. As a matter of
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this
essay will present views on both subjects. Each and
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in
this
world
has a
background
, be it good or bad, which makes it history.
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I mentioned in my introduction that for progress to take place,
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should be known or understood because it will give an understanding of the full circle of the subject.
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an existing company may decide to expand their market into different parts of the
world
, they should do a
background
check of the existing products, how they
perfomed
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performed
in the past, how are they doing currently, that
background
check will help them to predict the future of the product. I view
technology
and
science
as of equal relevance because they are the feet and the eyes of the current
world
, in the sense that they have made our lives easier and manageable.
Technology
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may
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ways, the easier ones accessible to most people are the internet, cellphone computers and the like. As mentioned in the
first
paragraph, the company which has done its proper
background
check will
then
use
technology
for marketing, communication, payments and the like.
On the other
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science
has played a major role
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in the health sector. Many people managed to get health assistance through
science
and
technology
. Many health devices
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invented through
science
and
technology
. In conclusion, I would say both
science
,
technology
and history are of great relevance
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above facts I have presented. They
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hand in
hence
,
therefore
they are important.
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  • crucial
  • comprehend
  • retrospect
  • gain insights
  • reflect on
  • sharpen
  • evaluate
  • significance
  • heritage
  • legacy
  • advent
  • breakthroughs
  • sustain
  • sustainability
  • revolutions
  • empowered
  • overcome
  • transform
  • advancements
  • collaboration
  • cooperation
  • diversity
  • fulfilling
  • promote
  • facilitate
  • prosperity
  • enhance
  • foster
  • foundation
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