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A good friend has just changed schools and is having difficulty fitting in and needs your advice. Write a letter to your friend. In your letter • make suggestions as to how they could make friends • suggest joining clubs, participating in school activities • give any extra general advice

#friend #schools #difficulty #advice #suggestions #friends #clubs #school #activities
Dear Julie , It’s so nice to receive a letter from you because I’ve been
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 it since the day you left me . And , I’m so glad to give a hand about settling in
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 environment.
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, especially, in unfamiliar surroundings . So , you should wear a smile on your face .
Also
 , you don’t forget to listen more and talk less when you don’t know something very well.
Likewise
 , you’d better join weekly conversation clubs in order to know about new friends and
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build a good rapport with them . Plus , if you have more free time , I suggest you ought to participate in school sports activities so that you could get along well
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each other .
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 but not least , if I were you , I would exchange social media accounts in order to keep in touch all the time . I suppose
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it is a good way to know ins and outs of your classmates. If you need more advice , don’t hesitate to write
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 anytime. Keep in touch, Mee Mee
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The Closing

The style of the letter determine how you have to close it.

Check out the suggested closing sentences for each type of letter in the General IELTS Test. The closing sentence should be the last sentence of your letter.

Formal style (To someone you have not met, whose name you don’t know)

  • Yours faithfully,

Semi-formal (To someone you may or may not have met, whose last name you know)

  • Yours sincerely,

Informal (To someone you know well, whose first name you know and use)

  • Best regards,
  • Warm wishes,

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