Many parents complain about violence promoted to their children through video games, TV programs and other media. Why is it happening? What can be the solution for it?

Nowadays, there are plenty of video games, tv shows and other media containing plenty of violent stuff which may have detrimental
effects
on
children
. Since we live in a world
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full of technology, it undoubtedly has some negative
effects
on people including
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the violent
behavior
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of
children
, detriment the relationship of
children
with others and
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the
violence
.
However
, those negative
effects
are not unpreventable with some methods. Occasionally,
children
are exposed to
violence
from video games or tv shows. Since
children
are
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learners which means they learn several things from observing
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, it is very important to control what they see or what they don’t see because they behave according to what they saw. If they see
violence
, they will behave aggressively because they think it’s the true way to behave.
In addition
,
children
who perform violent
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are not preferred as a friend by other
children
and they will possibly become lonely which may cause them to behave more aggressively.
Last
but not least,
children
who
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violent media may see
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violence
as a normal thing that most people do, so when they become an adult, they may behave like
this
because it’s the true thing for them. Of course, we can prevent or decrease those
effects
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limiting the time for technology of our
children
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doing other activities like reading more or playing
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the garden.
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, we can select
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safe technological media for them
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being extra careful about their content and
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sure they are not containing
violence
.
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A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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