Many parents complain about violence promoted to their children through video games, TV programs and other media. Why is it happening? What can be the solution for it?

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Nowadays, there are plenty of video games, tv shows and other media containing plenty of violent stuff which may have detrimental

effects

children

. Since we live in a world

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full of technology, it undoubtedly has some negative

effects

on people including

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the violent

behavior

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children

, detriment the relationship of

children

with others and

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the

violence

However

, those negative

effects

are not unpreventable with some methods. Occasionally,

children

are exposed to

violence

from video games or tv shows. Since

children

are

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learners which means they learn several things from observing

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, it is very important to control what they see or what they don’t see because they behave according to what they saw. If they see

violence

, they will behave aggressively because they think it’s the true way to behave.

In addition

children

who perform violent

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are not preferred as a friend by other

children

and they will possibly become lonely which may cause them to behave more aggressively.

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but not least,

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violent media may see

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violence

as a normal thing that most people do, so when they become an adult, they may behave like

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because it’s the true thing for them. Of course, we can prevent or decrease those

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limiting the time for technology of our

children

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doing other activities like reading more or playing

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safe technological media for them

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being extra careful about their content and

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sure they are not containing

violence

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Summary
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Prediction or recommendation

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In a nutshell
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meeting the goal of 7 or more
3Word repetition
meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
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Introduction & conclusion present

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Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 4.0

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Clear & comprehensive ideas

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Many parents complain about violence promoted to their children through video games, TV programs and other media. Why is it happening? What can be the solution for it?

Include an introduction and conclusion

Essentional vocabulary list for IELTS Writing 7+

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Some people believe that it is the responsibility of individuals to take care of their own health and diet. Others however believe that the Government should make sure that their citizens have a healthy diet. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

Some people believe that it is best to accept a bad situation, such as an unsatisfactory job or a shortage of money. Others argue that it is better to try and improve such situations. Discuss both these views and give your opinion.