Completing university education is thought by some to be the best way to get a good job. On the other hand, others think that getting experience and developing soft skills is more important. Discuss both ways and give your opinion.

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people
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universities to get a better job and some
people
think that getting
experince
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experience
and developing soft skills important than education.In my
opinion
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territory
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education puts one step
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a head
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of others.In
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essay, I will explain both views and give my opinion.
firstly
, education is essential for future work opportunities because
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can improve
productivity
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of the
organizationand
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organization and
increasing number of graduates show how significant
this
level of erudite is and easily communicate with other peoples and give more ideas to the company.
moreover
,we can reduce unemployment in
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society.
for instance
, many country
people
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some other countries to study
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universties
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universities
to get a better
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.
secondly
, there are an overwhelming number of applicants for some positions
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although
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leadership and
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interpersonal can
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the
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balance in favour of the applicant.
however
,some companies
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only valuable acquired soft skills
applicants
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only because they want some
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people
who have
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skills in that position will get easily
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accessible
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positon
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.
for example
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the
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companies
hiring
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some
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experience
candiates
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candidates
only in certain positions. In conclusion, having
softskills
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soft skills
soft-skills
and experience will develop the
organazation
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organization
but graduation is
also
important to the company.in my opinion
betterniversity
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better university
students
also
get a better job.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • structured and comprehensive understanding
  • specialized skills
  • critical thinking
  • problem-solving abilities
  • career advancement
  • networking opportunities
  • internships
  • alumni associations
  • career services
  • practical experience
  • hands-on skills
  • trades, arts, and technology
  • soft skills
  • communication
  • teamwork
  • leadership
  • real-world working environment
  • job performance
  • career growth
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