In some countries, people are spending long hours at the workplace. Why does this happen? Is it a positive or negative development?

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people
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for their careers.
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an advocate of
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. There
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a wide range of reasons why
people
use a lot of
time
in the
workplace
and the working environment is one of those. Some kinds of
works
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work
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required technical
equipments
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equipment
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or high-tech
device
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devices
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, which are only available in
company
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the company
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.
Therefore
,
people
have to stay most of
time
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in
enterprise
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the enterprise
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to finish their tasks with the best result.
For example
, a photographer
have
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to stay in their studio for a long
time
because only their studio can provide all
equipments
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equipment
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that they need
such
as
camera
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a camera
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, light, gimbal,
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So it is impossible for photo-takers to spend
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of
time
to work
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working
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at home.
Hence
, staying in
workplace
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the workplace
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play a paramount significant role in
performance
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the performance
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of
works
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work
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. Without a shadow of a doubt, making use of long hours in
workplace
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the workplace
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is urgently significant. Nowadays, abundant companies are armed with top-notch services,
therefore
, it can enhance
staffs’
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staffs
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productivity. So staff can easily spend most of the day in their
company
to finish their tasks with the highest quality and directly contribute to the success of the enterprise .
For example
, Shopee VietNam is a leading
company
in the technological market aspect and they provide junk food, coffee and soft drink to provide temporary energy for their
staffs
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staff
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.
Hence
, Shopee’s
staffs
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staff
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can easily work for a long
time
and support Shopee to become a top corporation in Vietnam.
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, spending long hours in
workplace
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the workplace
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is indispensable
in
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to
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the success of the
company
. In conclusion, using a great deal of
time
in
company
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a company
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bring back abundant benefits for both
staffs
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staff
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and corporations.
Consequently
,
people
should spend most of
time
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their time
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in enterprise for the best achievement.
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