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Some people believe that violence on television and in computer games has a damaging effect on the society. Others deny that these factors have any significant influence on people's behaviour. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

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It is argued by some politicians and media authorities that violent content media has been worsened
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individual’s behaviour and community, others think these are not causing any harm. From my point of view,
violence
 in any way has bad effects on
person’s
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 mindset and society.
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 on past events, violent
contents
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 has been added to
films
 as the best way to help the viewers understand more and have
better
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 vision
about
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 realities around the world.
For instance
, terrorist scenes and concepts of robbery are more easily imagined
throughout
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 watching and hearing documentary
films
.
In addition
, benefits greatly from playing violent games, not only enhance cognitive-skill by training the brain to handle complex situations but
also
 help improve decision-making skill.
Therefore
,
people
 consider watching
films
 and playing games which involve violent content as a learning tool and
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 any vital influence on
people
's behaviour. Many developers and programer have abused the aggressive instinct to increase the excitement of the games and
films
. Murder, killing and bullying were seen as normal or enjoyful until
it
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 influenced real-world by forming violent lifestyles which may cause criminal behaviours. Virtual and reality can be mixed, gamers and viewers will be led to accept
these
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violence
 and consider it as the truth and legal in the real world. It not only affects the subconscious but
also
 involves
unconscious
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 mindset where
people
 can’t control themselves. According to that, we can deny
violence
 can’t cause bad effects on
people
 and society. To sum up,
these
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violence
 depends on the perception of each person. In my point of view, I strongly
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belive
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 that it will influence
the
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 harmonious life
where
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consist
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 of
people
 and society.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • pivotal
  • desensitize
  • catalyst
  • predisposed
  • harmless outlet
  • distinguish
  • controlled environments
  • empirical research
  • minimal or no direct correlation
  • socio-economic status
  • predisposition
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