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Nowdays many people have access ti computers and a large number of children enjoy playing video games .what are the advantage and disadvantage of playing video games for children

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Nowadays the majority of people have access to a computer and a large number of children enjoy playing televised
games
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 children televised
games
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 improve the ability to reason and solve problems ,on the other hands' televised
games
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 are high risk basically playing televised
games
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 improves vision and life skills.In recent days technology bonded today to
life
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 .
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 playing football televised
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 shows teamwork and problem solving creates more and more ideas .it reduces stress level
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, playing televised
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 is highly addictive.most important it can increase child obesity .
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 in recent days blue whale
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 create children increased violent mindset and in most
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countries were banned . to conclude playing televised
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 improves life skills and problem-solving .opposite to increases child obesity and violence level .they maybe become obese with poor social skills
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