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The plan illustrates the changes from the year 2010 to the present. Overall, at present, the space in the
garden
 area has decreased compared to the year 2010.
Moreover
, the number of
student-bedroom
 became more than the total number of the past 2010. In 2010, the wide-area
garden
 can be seen from each side of the plan. There is
also
; 1 living room, 3 students-bedroom, 1 bathroom, a kitchen, as well as a hallway. At the moment, the space of the
garden
 was reduced on the backside and the space was added to the
student-bedroom
, the living room was removed and converted to a
student-bedroom
 as well, which gives the total number of 5
student-bedroom
. It can be seen that the kitchen is doubled with a social area in just one place. Along the hallway, an En-suite room was added beside the student bedroom. And in the front of the plan, the
garden
 was replaced by car parking. Both main entrance and hallway are on the same place since 2010 and at present.
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