During a recent plane journey, you sat next to a businessman who owns a chain of restaurants. You talked to him and he suggested that you should contact him about a possible job in one of his restaurants.

Dear
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Anderson My name is Nancy Botwin. We met on
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from Toronto to Halifax on the 5th of October. We set in the seats near to each other and
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discussed international cuisine;
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you gave me your business card. I hope you will remember me. Now, I am writing
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to see if you have a position
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a pastry chef in your restaurant`s chain. As I have said
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during the flight I am a Pastry chef in one of the most popular
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in Budapest, “
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”. Due to my circumstances, I am forced to move to London and I would love to work in one of your restaurants there. I am
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skilled pastry cook with seven years
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. Expert at creating new and exciting dishes If you find my skills and experience suitable, please contact me to schedule
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an interview. Thank you for your time and consideration. Yours sincerely Nancy Botwin.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • chain of restaurants
  • potential job opportunity
  • relevant experience
  • managerial role
  • customer service
  • qualifications
  • certifications
  • unique skills
  • eagerness
  • admiration
  • resume
  • references
  • face-to-face meeting
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