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In many countries, people have wider variety of food than can be grown in their local area.as a result, then much of the food people eat today has to come from other regions. Do you think that advantages of this trend outweigh the disadvantages?

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The shown pie charts represent the proportion of three different categories of nutrients, sodium, saturated fats and excess
sugars
 in four daily meals which will be fruitless if they are served too much. Overall, the percentage of sodium and saturated fats are so much in dinner, while
sugars
 are added to the snacks considerably. Notably, the morning meal has had the least amount of all three types of nutrients.
To begin
 with, we see that, in the morning the rate of the serving of each type of ingredient follows a similar pattern with about 14 to 16 per
cent
.
Also
, they are between just below 20 per
cent
 to under a
third
 for lunch meals. So it seems that there not be eaten too much and in a futile way in breakfast and at noon.
On the other hand
,
sugars
 are so exceeded in snacks with about 42 per
cent
, while people tend to eat fewer other ingredients in
this
 meal between 14 to 21 per
cent
.
Also
, at night people are eating a great amount of sodium and saturated fats with under a half (43%) and 37% respectively.
This
 is just above one out of five for added
sugars
.
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