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You recently organised an all-day meeting for your company, which took place in a local hotel. In their feedback, participants at the meeting said that they liked the hotel, but they were unhappy about the food that was served for lunch. Write a letter to the manager of the hotel. In your letter o Say what the participant liked about the hotel. o Explain why they were unhappy about the hotel. o Suggest what the manager should do to improve the food in futures.

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Dear Sir/Madam, I am
manager
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the manager
a manager

The noun phrase manager seems to be missing a determiner before it. Consider adding an article.

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 of Kandor Accounting services company that reserved your hotel for
annual
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the annual
an annual

The noun phrase annual meeting seems to be missing a determiner before it. Consider adding an article.

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 meeting on 2nd April. I am writing to express some dissatisfaction with your food. In spite of some objections, all the participants were extremely thrilled to see the arrangements and friendly staff.
Also
Linking Words

Usage of linking words is important in IELTS writing. They help create clear connections between ideas in your writing. They improve the flow of your essay by showing relationships between paragraphs and sentences. Using appropriate linking words demonstrates your ability to write cohesively and will help you achieve a higher band score.

,
supply
Correct article usage
the supply

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 of unlimited drinks and mocktails
had
Unnecessary verb
apply

The verb had appears to be unnecessary here.

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kept them really fresh and
fulfill
Replace the word
fulfilled

The word fulfill doesn’t seem to fit this context. Consider replacing it with a different one.

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 during the discussion.
However
Linking Words

Usage of linking words is important in IELTS writing. They help create clear connections between ideas in your writing. They improve the flow of your essay by showing relationships between paragraphs and sentences. Using appropriate linking words demonstrates your ability to write cohesively and will help you achieve a higher band score.

, I would like to bring your notice one aspect that, In
this
Linking Words

Usage of linking words is important in IELTS writing. They help create clear connections between ideas in your writing. They improve the flow of your essay by showing relationships between paragraphs and sentences. Using appropriate linking words demonstrates your ability to write cohesively and will help you achieve a higher band score.

 modern era everyone prefers to eat healthy and fresh food but, the fish and chips served us was cold and bit uncooked.
Moreover
Linking Words

Usage of linking words is important in IELTS writing. They help create clear connections between ideas in your writing. They improve the flow of your essay by showing relationships between paragraphs and sentences. Using appropriate linking words demonstrates your ability to write cohesively and will help you achieve a higher band score.

, your dishes were cracked from
sides
Correct article usage
the sides

It seems that there is an article usage problem here.

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 which left us in shock.
Hence
Linking Words

Usage of linking words is important in IELTS writing. They help create clear connections between ideas in your writing. They improve the flow of your essay by showing relationships between paragraphs and sentences. Using appropriate linking words demonstrates your ability to write cohesively and will help you achieve a higher band score.

, I would suggest you replace your containers with a new and healthy model because of respect to the customer.
In addition
Linking Words

Usage of linking words is important in IELTS writing. They help create clear connections between ideas in your writing. They improve the flow of your essay by showing relationships between paragraphs and sentences. Using appropriate linking words demonstrates your ability to write cohesively and will help you achieve a higher band score.

, warmers can be used to keep warm foods from the kitchen to desks. I hope you can settle these matters in future. John

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The Closing

The style of the letter determine how you have to close it.

Check out the suggested closing sentences for each type of letter in the General IELTS Test. The closing sentence should be the last sentence of your letter.

Formal style (To someone you have not met, whose name you don’t know)

  • Yours faithfully,

Semi-formal (To someone you may or may not have met, whose last name you know)

  • Yours sincerely,

Informal (To someone you know well, whose first name you know and use)

  • Best regards,
  • Warm wishes,

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