Some people feel that governments should take a large proportion of people's salaries to pay for necessary public services such as roads and schools. Others feel that high taxes are a bad thing. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

In many
countries
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,countries
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people
pay
taxes
to
governments
. Some believe they should give
high
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a high
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amount
of their wages for public
services
; whereas, other think large
taxes
have negative impacts. From my point of view, society should not be given plenty of their
money
which results in problems in their lives. With
considerable
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a considerable
the considerable
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amount
of
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in
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people
's salaries, authorities can provide numerous facilities for countries. They can provide society
outstanding
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with outstanding
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services
, and develop the country and living standards as well.
For example
, a developed wealthy country can renew the public transportation,
like
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by
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bringing modern trains
in
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to
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their cities.
Moreover
, more public buildings can be constructed
such
as hospitals and
more
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apply
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schools. These
services
and facilities can improve
people
's lives and make them proud
to
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of
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their
governments
.
On the other hand
, provided that
governments
are paid a lot of
taxes
,
people
would not have enough
money
to provide
their
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for their
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needs.
Community
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The community
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have a huge
numbers
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number
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of demand
such
as paying for bills, educational institution fees,
foods
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food
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, and clothes.
Although
people
must have
prioritizing
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prioritized
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in spend their
money
, they should have most of their
wage
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wages
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to be able to provide
their
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for their
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necessary requirements. Many employees are not paid significantly,
consequently
, if they give
most
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a most
the most
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proportion of their salaries, they cannot apply them
for
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to
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their demands. I believe
governments
should consider individuals'
problem
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problems
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in their lives, and
do
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apply
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not give a lot of
incomes
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income
show examples
. In conclusion, there
are
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is
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various
opinion
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opinions
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about the
amount
of
money
for giving
taxes
to authorities. Many believe
this
amount
should be high to develop countries'
services
and facilities.
However
,
other
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others
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believe these high
taxes
cannot solve individuals' needs.
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