You have seen an advertisement in an Australian magazine for someone to live with a family for six months and look after their six-year-old child. Write a letter to the parents. In your letter • explain why you would like the job • give details of why you would be a suitable person to employ • say how you would spend your free time while you are in Australia Start with 'Dear Sir,'

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letter regarding a job advertisement
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month's Australian magazine.
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of all, let me introduce
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my interest in
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job. I am a university student who just passed
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fourth year
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exam recently. Due to today's world's business declination, my parents have
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study frequently. So, I would like to use my summer to gain some cash to help my parents. As far as I am concerned, you would need only six months
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to take care of your child who is six years old. I am
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and
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before
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how to look after a kid. To be more specific, I have a
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brother
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age as your boy.
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, I am used to
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with
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house keeping
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works
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related to babysitting, like studying together or giving ears to them. I was wondering if you could give me
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job because visiting Australia is a thing
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my bucket list. I believe I could spend my
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time
benefically
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beneficially
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by going around the tourist destinations and exploring the untouched places of Australia. I would be grateful if you give me
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kind opportunity. I look forward to hearing good news from you. Yours faithfully, Tun Naung Win

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The Greeting

Depending on the style and aim of the letter, you will need to adapt your greeting.

Always start an informal letter in the ways:

  • Dear + name
  • Hi / Hello + name

‘Dear...’ is more appropriate, so stick with this.

For a formal letter there are two options for the greeting:

  • Use Dear Sir or Madam if you don’t know the name of the person you are writing to.
  • Use Dear + surname if you do know their name, e.g. Dear Mr Smith or Dear Mrs Jones.

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