You have seen an advertisement in an Australian magazine for someone to live with a family for six months and look after their six-year-old child. Write a letter to the parents. In your letter • explain why you would like the job • give details of why you would be a suitable person to employ • say how you would spend your free time while you are in Australia Start with 'Dear Sir,'

Dear Sir/Madam, I am writing

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letter regarding a job advertisement

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this

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month's Australian magazine.

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of all, let me introduce

about

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apply

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my interest in

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job. I am a university student who just passed

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the fourth

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fourth year

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exam recently. Due to today's world's business declination, my parents have

inablility

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inability

to contribute

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study frequently. So, I would like to use my summer to gain some cash to help my parents. As far as I am concerned, you would need only six months

excatly

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exactly

to take care of your child who is six years old. I am

confidence

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and

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experiences

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before

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how to look after a kid. To be more specific, I have a

yonger

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younger

brother

same

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age as your boy.

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, I am used to

deal

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with

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housekeeping

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house keeping

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housekeeping

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works

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related to babysitting, like studying together or giving ears to them. I was wondering if you could give me

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job because visiting Australia is a thing

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my bucket list. I believe I could spend my

relax

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time

benefically

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beneficially

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by going around the tourist destinations and exploring the untouched places of Australia. I would be grateful if you give me

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kind opportunity. I look forward to hearing good news from you. Yours faithfully, Tun Naung Win

tunnaungwin11

May 10, 2022

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The Greeting

Depending on the style and aim of the letter, you will need to adapt your greeting.

Always start an informal letter in the ways:

Dear + name
Hi / Hello + name

‘Dear...’ is more appropriate, so stick with this.

For a formal letter there are two options for the greeting:

Use Dear Sir or Madam if you don’t know the name of the person you are writing to.
Use Dear + surname if you do know their name, e.g. Dear Mr Smith or Dear Mrs Jones.

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meeting the goal of 7 or more
0
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meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
20
Grammar mistakes
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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 9.0

Logical structure

Single idea per paragraph

Greeting and closing

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 5.0

Complete response

Suitable writing tone

Appropriate word count

7 paragraphs

209 words

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The Greeting

Nowadays, many people complain that they have difficulties getting enough sleep. What problem can lack of sleep cause? What can be done about lack of sleep ?

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