You have seen an advertisement in an Australian magazine for someone to live with a family for six months and look after their six-year-old child. Write a letter to the parents. In your letter • explain why you would like the job • give details of why you would be a suitable person to employ • say how you would spend your free time while you are in Australia Start with 'Dear Sir,'

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Dear Sir/Madam, I am writing

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letter regarding a job advertisement

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this

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month's Australian magazine.

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of all, let me introduce

about

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apply

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my interest in

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job. I am a university student who just passed

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the fourth

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fourth year

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exam recently. Due to today's world's business declination, my parents have

inablility

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inability

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study frequently. So, I would like to use my summer to gain some cash to help my parents. As far as I am concerned, you would need only six months

excatly

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exactly

to take care of your child who is six years old. I am

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and

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experiences

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before

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how to look after a kid. To be more specific, I have a

yonger

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younger

brother

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age as your boy.

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, I am used to

deal

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with

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housekeeping

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house keeping

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works

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related to babysitting, like studying together or giving ears to them. I was wondering if you could give me

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job because visiting Australia is a thing

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my bucket list. I believe I could spend my

relax

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time

benefically

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beneficially

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by going around the tourist destinations and exploring the untouched places of Australia. I would be grateful if you give me

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kind opportunity. I look forward to hearing good news from you. Yours faithfully, Tun Naung Win

tunnaungwin11Tue May 10 2022

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The Greeting

Depending on the style and aim of the letter, you will need to adapt your greeting.

Always start an informal letter in the ways:

Dear + name
Hi / Hello + name

‘Dear...’ is more appropriate, so stick with this.

For a formal letter there are two options for the greeting:

Use Dear Sir or Madam if you don’t know the name of the person you are writing to.
Use Dear + surname if you do know their name, e.g. Dear Mr Smith or Dear Mrs Jones.

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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 9.0

Logical structure

Single idea per paragraph

Greeting and closing

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 5.0

Complete response

Suitable writing tone

Appropriate word count

7 paragraphs

209 words

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The Greeting

It is more important to have a good family than to have friends. Family can always compensate for absence of friendship. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

Fossil fuel is the main source of energy. In some countries, the use of alternative sources of energy is encouraged. To what extent do you think is it a positive or nagetive development?

28.Some people argue that the development of technology is making our lives too complex, and the solution is for everyone to accept a simpler way of life without using that technology. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

Large businesses have big budgets for marketing and promotion and as a result, people gravitate towards buying their products. What problems does this cause? What could be done to encourage people to buy local products?

News stories on TV and in newspapers are very often accompanied by pictures. Some people say that these pictures are more effective than words. What is your opinion about this? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.