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The graphs below show the numbers of male and female workers in 1975 and 1995 in several employment sectors of the Republic of Freedonia.

The graphs below show the numbers of male and female workers in 1975 and 1995 in several employment sectors of the Republic of Freedonia.
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The line graphs provide information about the
numbers
 of
men
 and
women
 of the Republic of Freedonia who are employed in 6 different areas in 1975 and 1995.
Overall
, it can be seen that in 1975 the
number
 of
male
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males
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 is higher than
female
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females
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 in all categories but in 1995
women
 started to be ahead of
men
 in some sectors
suxh
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such
 as communications, wholesale and retail trade.  In 1975 the
number
 of
emloyed
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employed
men
 in manufacturing is about 700
while
women
 take only 300. As for
communications
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,communications
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 there are almost the same
numbers
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number
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 of people but in the finance
category
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,category
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 there are nearly 200
female
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females
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 and more than 400
men
.
Also
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,Also
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 wholesale and retail trade
include
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 about 500
women
 and 700
men
while
 in the public
sector
 (non-defence) these
numbers
 are higher by 100 people. The
last
one
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apply
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category is the public
sector
 (defence) which includes 100
women
 and 200
men
. It can be seen that some of these
numbers
had
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changed in 1995. The
number
 of
women
 who are employed in communication increased
while
 the
numbers
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number
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 of
men
 stayed unchanged.
Also
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,Also
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 the
number
 of
female
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females
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 in the banking
sector
 had
a
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apply
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surge
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surged
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 to almost 500.
Moreover
 statistics of
women
 in the wholesale and public
sector
 (defence)
raised
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were raised
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.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "also, while".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words numbers, men, women, number, sector with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "numbers of" was used 7 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "almost" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 3 times.
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