In many parts of the world, women study science and technology, but do not work in these fields. What measures can be taken to encourage women to work in science and technology.

In
this
present world,
women
are tending to study science and technology, and they are qualified as
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engineering, doctor and stuff like that, but have no
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active role to contribute. In
this
essay, I will give some remedial steps about how to deal with
this
situation.
Firstly
, the solution
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motivating
women
to contribute positively to society is probably that the household chores should be shared between men and
women
.
In other words
, the vast majority of the working
women
could not juggle both their domestic responsibilities and
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workload. As a consequence,
this
situation can lead the working
women
with the high degree to resign and even give up
from
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their professional
career
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in order to do the maternal tasks;
therefore
, if the domestic chores are divided equally
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family members, they will be stimulated to be more active to work in science and technology.
Secondly
,
women
are not considered in certain jobs. traditionally
women
have been restricted in
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certain jobs. These days there are constant stories about
women
should work
in
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profession
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which
are
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delicate
such
as cooking, teaching and things like that, so if
women
are regarded in the determined
career
because of the lack of their abilities in performing technological and scientific
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, it would cause
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women
’s activity in the society and
also
has
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toll on
women
right. In conclusion,
women
with
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high qualification can be motivated and encouraged to work in their educated
career
by sharing the domestic chores equally and not
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of
women
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abilities in
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certain jobs.
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