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In many parts of the world, women study science and technology, but do not work in these fields. What measures can be taken to encourage women to work in science and technology.

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In
this
 present world,
women
 are tending to study science and technology, and they are qualified as
an
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engineering, doctor and stuff like that, but have no
an
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active role to contribute. In
this
 essay, I will give some remedial steps about how to deal with
this
 situation.
Firstly
, the solution
of
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 motivating
women
 to contribute positively to society is probably that the household chores should be shared between men and
women
.
In other words
, the vast majority of the working
women
 could not juggle both their domestic responsibilities and
grueling
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 workload. As a consequence,
this
 situation can lead the working
women
 with the high degree to resign and even give up
from
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their professional
career
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 in order to do the maternal tasks;
therefore
, if the domestic chores are divided equally
into
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 family members, they will be stimulated to be more active to work in science and technology.
Secondly
,
women
 are not considered in certain jobs. traditionally
women
 have been restricted in
the
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certain jobs. These days there are constant stories about
women
 should work
in
particular
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profession
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 which
are
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 delicate
such
 as cooking, teaching and things like that, so if
women
 are regarded in the determined
career
 because of the lack of their abilities in performing technological and scientific
career
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, it would cause
less
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women
’s activity in the society and
also
 has
heavy
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 toll on
women
 right. In conclusion,
women
 with
the
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high qualification can be motivated and encouraged to work in their educated
career
 by sharing the domestic chores equally and not
limitation
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 of
women
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 abilities in
the
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certain jobs.
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