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graph shows the statistic of car drivers in Britain
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over the speed limit having being filmed by
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and the
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of people
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in
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, during the 8 years since speed cameras have been set up. On the one hand,it’s well known that parents play a quite vital role in the upbringing of their kids.
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, educating them alone at home does not always mean bringing them
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future. For
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reason,it’s extremely important to be given formal education to the children.
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is why many education institutions try to enhance the
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of diverse lessons and seminars which transform
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child
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consistently
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a human
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Moreover
,there are specialized
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that train your confidence in society,becoming you as
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an easy-going
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and communicative individual which makes friends easily and don’t mind having his own opinion in
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the community
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.
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,in some countries there are lessons,that are related to
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students how to behave in society, they show you
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aspects of the principal social rules.
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is the way I see education in schools,my point of view is positive about that,but
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there are some negative sides.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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