Some countries today have passed laws against smoking tobacco in public buildings such as offices and restaurants. Other countries have no intention of doing this. Consider the possible arguments on both sides of this debate, and reach your own conclusion on which side you favour.

Generally, many
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conceive that smoking anyway is not judicious and brings so
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hazardous effects to the community. According to
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social demand, Governments approved
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laws which
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smoking forbidden in public or closed places like restaurants or offices. There are
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who consider no restriction
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smoking even in
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. Both aspects would be discussed here. Altogether, most
countries
which promote the idea of
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or limiting tobacco smoking are between developed ones that extra to
this
rule, obey many other restrictive but advanced laws like
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, sanitarian
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, feminine equity and etc. They sense the recent needs of their citizens and
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respect to these necessities, manage their rules. Among these populations, we can name Scandinavian
countries
that do their best in
this
way. Another reason which may enforce governments in restricting tobacco at least in public is the unbridle incidence of respiratory diseases among
people
who smoke, which, not only makes a lot of mortality and morbidity in
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but
also
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. So, provided that they could control the prevalence of
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among
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youngsters, they will promote the rate of health in
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. On the other side, there are
countries
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this
problem and believe that many more important corners yet remain to be solved. So let
people
how to react to
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difficulty by themselves. Another reason, is that may the rate of disease is not so high in the communities to be noticed or the manner of replacing
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of smoking is unknown
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them. Any way priority of controlling or forbidding cigarette smoking in
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like restaurants or offices is not serious and not ordered. In conclusion, despite being both aspects of
this
scheme, as I hate smoking myself and know the hazardous effects of it on the health of
people
according to my job, prefer laws which oblige
people
not to smoke in public places and even if it
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possible nowhere.
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