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As most people spend a major part of their adult life at work, job satisfaction is an important element of individual wellbeing. What factors contribute to job satisfaction?

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compares
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 average
house
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 costs in three European cities (Madrid,
London
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 and Frankfurt), one Asian
city
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 (
Tokyo
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) and an American
city
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 (New York) in a 12 years period
with
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 1989. Units are given in
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percent
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. It can be concluded from the bar charts that the average
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 prices in
London
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 and
Tokyo
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was
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 totally similar and lowest between 1990 to 1995 whereas the average
house
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 price in
Tokyo
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 increased suddenly that became
to
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the most expensive
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 based on home prices between 1996 to 2002.
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 the other hand
average
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the average
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 cost of houses in Madrid was the lowest in the
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 5 years period but became
to
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the
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expensive
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most expensive
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city
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 between 1996 to 2002. According to the bar charts,
average
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 cost of houses in
Tokyo
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 and
London
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 experienced over
5
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percent
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 decrease between 1990 to 1995 compared with 1989.
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 in the
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 period,
London
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 saw a sharp increase to reach over 10
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 growth that made it as most expensive
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 based on
house
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 costs compared to 1989.
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, the average cost of
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a house
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house
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 in New York experienced about 10
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 growth and reached the
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 rank of expensive
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 prices between 1996 to 2002.
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, Madrid saw a little increase as appose
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 Frankfurt that decrease but not by much.
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