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As most people spend a major part of their adult life at work, job satisfaction is an important element of individual wellbeing. What factors contribute to job satisfaction?

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The supplied bar charts
compares
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 average
house
 costs in three European cities (Madrid,
London
 and Frankfurt), one Asian
city
 (
Tokyo
) and an American
city
 (New York) in a 12 years period
with
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from
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 1989. Units are given in
percent
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per cent
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. It can be concluded from the bar charts that the average
house
 prices in
London
 and
Tokyo
was
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were
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 totally similar and lowest between 1990 to 1995 whereas the average
house
 price in
Tokyo
 increased suddenly that became
to
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the most expensive
city
 based on home prices between 1996 to 2002.
In
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 the other hand
average
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the average
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 cost of houses in Madrid was the lowest in the
first
 5 years period but became
to
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the
second
expensive
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most expensive
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city
 between 1996 to 2002. According to the bar charts,
average
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the average
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 cost of houses in
Tokyo
 and
London
 experienced over
5
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a 5
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percent
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per cent
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 decrease between 1990 to 1995 compared with 1989.
Then
 in the
next
 period,
London
 saw a sharp increase to reach over 10
percent
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per cent
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 growth that made it as most expensive
city
 based on
house
 costs compared to 1989.
In addition
, the average cost of
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a house
the house
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house
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houses
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 in New York experienced about 10
percent
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per cent
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 growth and reached the
second
 rank of expensive
house
 prices between 1996 to 2002.
Although
, Madrid saw a little increase as appose
as
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 Frankfurt that decrease but not by much.
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