You recently visited a store and did not like the customer service there. Write a letter to the store manager and say: • What was the issue there? • Why wasn't the staff helpful? • Suggest what can be done about it?

Dear Sir, I am writing

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letter to raise a complaint regarding the hygiene issue at one of your

store

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. I have been visiting

to

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apply

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your shop frequently since I

have

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started working from home due to the covid pandemic breakdown. The issue that I want to highlight is the

dirts

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dirt

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and stains around the frozen storage.

Moreover

, it is quite disgusting when people stand over and after it melts. What is more,

although

I had complained to one of your staff, they never made it clean. I was wondering if you would and make some relevant training to them. It would be grateful if all of your shop clean and tidy at a level that can persuade more customers to your shop. I would appreciate it if you could design a proper cleaning schedule and a method of deep cleaning that they must follow daily

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those

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in those

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areas with exposure to food.

However

, I trust you will give your immediate attention to

this

matter. Else, I will compile complaint letters to the local customer and food authority. Yours faithfully, Tun Naung Win