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In today's job market it is far more important to have practical skills than theoretical knowledge. In the future, job applicants may not need any formal qualifications. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

#job #market #skills #future #applicants #qualifications
To land a
job
 in a company needs knowledge and skills to carry out the task safely. In the upcoming years, I fully disagree that
job
 seekers are not required a proper
learnings
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 for them to be hired
instead
 workers direly needed it. I will explain in the ensuing paragraph why I object
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this
 issue.
First
,
theory
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 is the backbone of obtaining ideas
which
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 professionals
required
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 to obtain.
For instance
, health workers
such
 as nurses must necessarily
to
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graduate from a four years curriculum to get a degree and pass the national nursing examination.
This
 is
the
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 significant factor for them to carry out and administer the right dosage of medicine to the correct patient since they learned
this
 information by context.
Second
, prior to
be
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 accepted in the aviation industry; a person must adhere to the safety and security of flying an aircraft by
practicing
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 and studying the fundamentals of
aeronotics
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aeronautics
, they need to comply with the qualification of educational background
that is
 successfully completed and free from alterations.
As a result
, they would be responsible for the safety and rendering
a
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high quality
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 services to the passengers. All individuals must acquire the formal education to perform the
job
 correctly like my
neigbour
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neighbour
 who has been working as a seafarer,
he
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commenced by obtaining a degree in marine
engeenering
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engineering
 before
applying
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 a
job
. His main
job
 description is repairing and maintaining the stability of the ship. Profound knowledge indeed is the major qualification
which
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 every company base the
applicants
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applicant's
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 mental capacity. In summary, practical skills might help an individual at work but cannot maintain the safety of a
job
. Learning by
book
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 could be an aid to have a powerful mindset in facing
ardous
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arduous
various
 circumstances
in
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 the
job
 site
such
 as nurses,
pilot
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 and marine
work
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 that were hired based on their excellent transcript of records.
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